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Dad:
Eh, im home.
Mum:
Okay.
(continues watching tv and eating her chips)
Dad:
Why aren’t you asking why im always home so late?
Mum:
Ah? Is it?
Dad:
Can you stop your eating and lame drama series, and get a life! It’s getting on my nerve.
Mum:
Can you stop nagging at me, I didn’t even stop you from drinking so why are you trying to stop me?
Dad:
All you do is just slack at home. TV TV TV TV, and munch your snacks away. Look at that spare tyre of yours. Can you like get your ass off and do some exercise?
Mum: (mumbling)
Yeah yeah yeah, whatever.
Dad:
What? Can you answer me?
Mum:
Please, I DON’T just stay home and watch tv. I work alright, and with you! Same company and all, I did put some effort in what I am suppose to do. What more do you want from me?
Dad:
Lose your flab? OR MAYBE, just give a shit to the children’s well being? That’s like the least I expect from a mum!
Mum:
Are you sure im not playing a good role as a mum? How bout you? I bet you don’t even know when are their exams and all, oh, and worst still! THEIR BIRTHDAYS!
Dad:
Oh shuddup. Im, im, . . . JUST TOO BUSY, OKAY!
Mum:*continues with the munching of snacks and tv*
humph, I don’t give a shit.
Dad: * walks back to the room*
door SLAM
This dialogue (while being fun to listen to), did not sound realistic or maintain any sort of tension (even in the written version). Writing dialogue is the art of writing what you might hear everyday, sieve out all the unnecessary stuff while retaining the spirit of it all. I think you need some practice with the sieving.